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People always have something to say about love in Hollywood. Many just cannot connect between celebrities and long-term relationships. High-profile relationships are often riddled with unfaithfulness and messy affairs! However, some stars stand out from others can teach us a few things when it comes to true love for them.
Take Cooper Anderson for example, who has a partner that all of us admire and would love to have. Some stars have made us prove that love still exists and is well: examples are Ellen DeGeneres, Neil Patrick Harris, Jillian Michaels, among others. Throw aside the dental implants, liposuction surgery, and Photoshop— we are purely speaking about love here. Let us now round up the biggest LBGT Hollywood power couples as we all know that love is a beautiful thing. Read on to learn more about them.
Butchered:
People always have something to say about love in Hollywood. Many just cannot connect celebrities and [with] long-term relationships. High-profile relationships are often riddled with unfaithfulness and messy affairs! However, some stars stand out from others can teach us a few things when it comes to true love for them.
[For example,] Take Cooper Anderson for example, who has a partner that all of us[we] admire and would love to have. Some stars have made us prove[s] that love still exists and is well: examples are Ellen DeGeneres, Neil Patrick Harris, Jillian Michaels, among others. Throw aside the dental implants, liposuction surgery, and Photoshop— we are purely speaking about love here. Let us now round up the biggest LBGT Hollywood power couples as we all know that love is a beautiful thing. Read on to learn [for] more about them [the biggest LBGT Hollywood power couples].
Cleaned up:
People always have something to say about love in Hollywood. Many cannot connect celebrities with long-term relationships. High-profile relationships are often riddled with unfaithfulness and messy affairs! However, some stars stand out when it comes to love.
For example, Cooper Anderson has a partner we admire and proves love still exists.
Throw aside implants, surgery, and Photoshop—we all know love is a beautiful thing. Read on for more about the biggest LBGT Hollywood power couples ...
Original: BeachRaider LBGT Celebrities Article
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I didn’t re-arrange much. Mainly just did a lot of cinching and tightening.
Clear, concise sentences pack more punch than needlessly long sentences.
I think too many name drops keep people from clicking through to the next “slide” of the article.
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